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Okay, I think the reason why people aren't commenting on this is that: 1) We see that there's a hidden message. Personally, I don't get it. 2) the poem on ...

As I stumble onto the stage My shadow walks beside me, without complaint This beginning was weak. I think the "without complaint" was the dull tag-on here. Silent slender feet ...

"he" "her" "he" "her". This is all very unclear. And I think you could fix the linebreaks a lot, to make it all more coherent and less...awkward. I'm sure there ...

in the back room of a locked ward of a Cut an "of" rice pudding on the floor Why rice pudding? In any case, it's all very beautiful. It took ...

my back, poorly stitched evidence of last night's explosion. Something is stitched after it falls apart or is beaten twice over or something, not from a big freaking BOOM! So ...

like seeing for the first time. I think you can make this more direct by using the word blind somewhere in here. [s]but[/s] you can ' t have the brightest ...

Sam glanced idly at the book she held, her search still fruitless after three hours. She had several books strewn about her, some falling off the small table in the ...

Okay, I guess my comment didnt go through. Ah, my husband, my treasure. I do not find the night dead. Separate romantically. I think the entire fact that it's german ...

this skin here is parchment this blood here is ink and what rots is in this and in you This really doesn't have a point to it. Otherwise, this is ...

and lingua ignota between sap and blood ; I'd see this better with just a plain old period. (a) steadfast reminder of life before light. Since the "night" is a ...

but forgive me, [s]now[/s] for i have sinned, [s]darling[/s] The occasionally "love" or "darling" adds to the perspective of the speaker, but extra words are reoccuring in your work. Just ...

fell from his graces, fell out of his love. this is a bit wordy. suggestions: lost his graces, lost his love? or perhaps "fell from his graces and his love." ...

You reuse a lot of your images, which I actually happen to enjoy. You come off a bit vague in the last six of so lines of the first stanza, ...

The beginning reminds me a bit of Lord of the Flies. But then I'm not exactly sure when you went in the middle. You have rhtyhm on some lines, and ...

A storm approaches, [s]a gale[/s] to strip me of my childhood. I can feel it like the tension in a room, before the exchange of angry words. No longer are ...